批改网英语作文评分标准(低分档作文展示及常用句型总结)

首页常识更新时间:2023-08-19 01:24:23

专四考试日益临近,不少宝子们在备考过程中都十分焦虑,因为做题错误率高,心里没底。那就制定计划,好好复习。此外,咱们还要清楚地知道主观题的评分标准,只有这样才能有的放矢地进行复习和备考。

今天这篇文章就以2016年专四真题为例,跟大家讲讲作文的评分标准和各个得分档次的作文范例。


2016年作文真题的材料是关于term-time holiday的,即有些英国的家长为了省钱和享有更多的旅游打折优惠,在正常学期期间请假带孩子出去旅游,从而影响教学质量和正常的教学秩序。


英国政府为严肃学校纪律,将采取措施禁止term-time holiday,并将对违反规则的家长进行罚款。

由于2016年是专四题型改革的第一年,作文由以前的命题作文变成了材料作文,很多同学不太适应,也没有做好准备,不少同学还套用以前两种相反观点的写法,并没有按要求总结材料的要点,还有不少同学材料都没有看懂,也不知道term-time holiday 指什么。


专四作文评分标准

点击图片可放大看得更清楚

从上图可知,专四作文的评分依据一共有三项,分别是:

学生作文举例

作文得分以及依据:

内容阐述能力:1 2

缩写部分:缩写不符合要求,表达有重大偏差(将原文理解为正反两方意见)

讨论:内容不切题(对term-time holidays 理解不正确)

篇章组织能力:1

语言运用能力:3

语言错误较多

详讲:

如图所示,这篇作文只能得7分,得分较低。其中内容阐述能力满分10分,缩写部分满分5分,讨论部分5分,此作文这10分只能得3分。

此作文缩写不符合要求,因为没有用自己的话言概括材料的要点,依然套用正反两种相反观点的写法(some in favor...some against),审题不清,没有按要求写作,所以缩写部分只得1分。

讨论内容跑题,疑似将term-time holidays 理解为“呆在家不上学”,比如作文中写道:Children is too young to learn by themselves. When they stay at home alone, they must waste lots of time. 所以讨论部分只得2分。

篇章组织能力满分3分,此作文只得了1分,其总体层次划分基本合理,但全文衔接手段不够丰富、自然。


语言运用满分7分,此作文语言错误、语法错误极多,所以语言语用能力只得了3分。比如,作文中第二段的

for on thing, 正确表达应为 for one thing;

children is 此处主谓不一致,正确表达应为 children are

作文最后一段最后一句话:

Not only bad for children, but also the whole family.

这句话是破碎句,即sentence fragment, 不是一个完整的句子,有明显的语法错误。

文中语法错误还有很多,不再一一列举,可见,如果基本语法不过关,就没办法遣词造句,作文中布满了语法错误,这样的作文很难得高分。

在写summary时,为了表明自己所写内容是和材料紧密结合在一起的,大家可以使用下列短语或句型:

The excerpt tells us that…

According to the excerpt,

The excerpt indicates that…

From the excerpt, we can have a better understanding of…

As the excerpt indicates…

The except reveals that…

From the excerpt, we know/find that...


excerpt是摘录的意思,可根据题干上的字眼将这个词汇换成report, survey等。比如2018年专四真题作文题干上就用的是report.

2016年专四真题summary 范文举例:

According to the excerpt(表明所写内容和摘录紧密联系), many parents in UK have taken their children to spend holidays during term time in order to save money(概括材料要点一). However, parents are to be banned by the UK's Education Secretary, from taking their children out of school to save money on holidays(概括材料要点二). In addition, strict penalties will be taken to bring down truancy levels and make education more academically rigorous(概括材料要点三). As far as I am concerned, it is unwise for parents to take children out of school for holidays during term time for convenience of enjoy travelling advantages(提出中心论点,表明自己的看法).

(此为河南科技大学外国语学院20级李忠俊同学批改网提交的练习作文)


As the excerpt indicates(表明下面所写的summary是依据摘录,和摘录紧密联系),parents in UK are to be banned from taking their children out of school in order to save money in the course of term time(概括材料要点一). What's more, the right of the headteacher to allow families to take truancy breaks will also be abolished in that students' absence from school is a damage to their academic studies(概括材料要点二). Both the school and the family will face fines for students not being at school during school time(概括材料要点三). From my perspective, term-time holidays should be banned for the sake of education, reasons listed as follows. (提出中心论点,表明自己的看法

(此为河南科技大学外国语学院20级李晴同学批改网提交的练习作文)

,
展开阅读全文
推荐内容
热门内容
热门文章

© 2007-2022 http://www.anhuiqq.cn,All Rights Reserved.